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one day a boy had a match against another but on the other hand the boy had a family crisis because his mum and dad wore about to divorce.the boy got so upset that he went late to the match because he was upset and he came late to the match so the manager shouted at him but he still played second half the team came together.
they wore losing 5-0 to the other team because the boy came late and he was the captain of the team so the boy put all his anger in to the game and played so rough that he got a red card for fowling the other player so the manager shouted at him and said was.
Well done Yasin, you have listened to my feedback! You now have the beginnings of a plot for your story, as well as some vital backstory and some basic characters.
ReplyDeleteYour target for the next stage is to develop your treatment further. What are the characters' names? What is the exact order of events of your storyline? Keep going, good start so far.